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IELTS Writing task 1

The chart below shows the number of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012.

Bước 1: Lập dàn ý 

Đoạn tổng quan: Mặc dù Bảo tàng Victoria và Albert ghi nhận số lượng khách tham quan lớn nhất vào năm 2007, nhưng nó đã bị Bảo tàng Quốc gia vượt qua vào năm 2012, với sự tăng liên tục suốt thời kỳ. Trong khi đó, Bảo tàng Anh, mặc dù có sự suy giảm đáng kể trong nửa đầu thời kỳ, đã quay trở lại và cuối cùng vẫn được xếp hạng thứ hai trong bảng xếp hạng.

Thân bài 1	Thân bài 2	Thân bài 3
Vào năm 2007, Bảo tàng Quốc gia đã nhận ít khách nhất, thu hút khoảng 6 triệu lượt khách. Tuy nhiên, con số này bắt đầu tăng dần từ điểm này trở đi, và đến cuối thời kỳ, nó đã đạt đến mức gần 16 triệu lượt khách, biến nó thành bảo tàng được thăm nhiều nhất.	Mặc dù Bảo tàng Victoria và Albert giữ vị trí trong hai năm đầu, đỉnh điểm này chỉ kéo dài trong thời gian ngắn khi số người đến thăm giảm đáng kể xuống mức thấp nhất gần 6 triệu lượt khách vào năm 2010. Mặc dù đã thực hiện phục hồi, dữ liệu cho Bảo tàng Victoria và Albert tăng lên một số không đáng kể và vẫn duy trì thấp nhất (10 triệu lượt khách).	Thay đổi tương tự như Bảo tàng Victoria và Albert đã được trải qua ở Bảo tàng Anh, số người đến thăm giảm đáng kể từ 12 triệu lượt khách vào năm 2007 xuống đến điểm thấp nhất của khoảng 6 triệu lượt khách trong hai năm tiếp theo. Tuy nhiên, điều làm nó nổi bật so với Bảo tàng Victoria và Albert là rằng trong nửa sau của thời kỳ, số lượng du khách tăng lên một mức độ lớn hơn, đạt đến điểm cao gần 15 triệu lượt khách vào năm 2012, chỉ thấp hơn một chút so với số du khách Bảo tàng Quốc gia.

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Bước 2: Hoàn thành bài luận

The bar chart presents variations in how many tourists came to three different kinds of museums over a 5-year period between 2007 and 2012.

Overall, although Victoria and Albert Museum recorded the largest number of visitors in 2007, it was overtaken by National Gallery in 2012, which increased consistently throughout. Meanwhile, the British Museum, despite considerable declines in the first half of the period, managed to regain its footing and was still eventually ranked second in the chart.

In 2007, National Gallery received the least number of visitors, attracting approximately 6 million visitors. However, its figure started to witness a gradual increase from this point onwards, and by the end of the period, it had reached a high of close to 16 million visitors, making it become the most frequented museum.

Although Victoria and Albert Museum retained the position in the first two years, this peak was short-lived as the number of people going there declined significantly to a trough of nearly 6 million visitors in 2010. Despite managing to make a recovery, the data for Victoria and Albert Museum increased by a negligible amount and still remained the lowest (10 million visitors).

A quite similar change to Victoria and Albert Museum was experienced in the British Museum, whose number of people visiting it decreased noticeably from a striking 12 million visitors in 2007 to its lowest point of roughly 6 million visitors in the following two years. However, what set it apart from Victoria and Albert Museum was that in the latter half of the period, its tourist numbers increased to a greater degree, reaching a peak of just under 15 million visitors in 2012, which was just marginally lower in comparison to the number of travellers the National Gallery welcomed.  

Bước 3: Từ vựng

Vocabulary	Meaning in Vietnamese
Frequent (v)	Thường xuyên
Short-lived	Tồn tại ngắn hạn
Make a recovery	Phục hồi
Negligible	Không đáng kể
Overtake	Vượt qua

Now, here are some gap-fill exercises using these words/phrases:

1. She ______________ her competitors and became the new champion.

• Answer: overtook

2. The success of their project was ______________; it didn’t last long.

• Answer: short-lived

3. After a period of decline, the company managed to ______________ and regain profitability.

• Answer: make a recovery

4. You should ______________ practice if you want to improve your language skills.

• Answer: frequent

5. The impact of the new tax policy on our profits was almost ______________.

• Answer: negligible

Bước 4: Cấu trúc ngữ pháp

A similar/opposite change, but to a greater/ lesser extent/ degree, was witnessed in + O, which + V.

Example: A similar change, but to a greater extent, was witnessed in the number of enquiries received in person, which grew dramatically from just over 400 enquiries in January to around 1900 enquiries in June. 

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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IELTS Writing task 2

The best way for a government to prepare for the future is to invest in young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Bước 1: Phân tích đề 

• Từ khoá: the best way, prepare for the future, invest in young people 
• Câu hỏi: Đây là dạng “Opinion Essay”, yêu cầu người viết cần đưa ra quan điểm của mình về việc bạn đồng ý hay không đồng ý với nhận định được đưa ra. 

Bước 2: Lập kế hoạch cho bài luận

Thân bài 1	Thân bài 2	Thân bài 3
Topic Sentence: Government investment in young individuals can significantly contribute to social progress and address pressing national problems. Supporting Ideas: 1. Young people constitute the future labor force and potential leaders. 2. Education and holistic development of young people can lead to a productive workforce. 3. A productive workforce can contribute to economic growth through higher incomes and taxes. 4. Young people can channel their energy and knowledge to address social issues like poverty and unemployment.	Topic Sentence: Recognizing the role of young people in driving digital innovation is crucial. Supporting Ideas: 1. Young people are adaptable and familiar with technology. 2. An education emphasizing science, technology, and innovation can prepare a tech-savvy workforce. 3. A tech-savvy workforce can enhance a country’s global competitiveness and attract foreign investment. 4. This approach ensures long-term economic benefits.	Topic Sentence: However, exclusive investment in the young generation overlooks the significance of resources directed towards the elderly. Supporting Ideas: 1. Older employees possess valuable experience and specialized knowledge. 2. Their expertise ensures consistent staff training and skills improvement in younger employees. 3. A well-educated workforce is crucial for long-term development. 4. Senior citizens can actively participate in community activities, promoting social cohesion and supporting public services.

Bước 3: Hoàn thành bài luận

Sample Essay 1 (Band 6.0)

Government investment in the younger generation is crucial for a country’s future readiness. However, it’s equally important to strike a balance by addressing the needs of both the young and the elderly in society.

Young individuals play a significant role in social progress and solving national problems. They form the future workforce and potential leaders of a nation. By providing them with education and holistic development opportunities, they can contribute positively to society. They can secure well-paying jobs, start businesses, pay taxes, and contribute to economic growth. Additionally, they can channel their energy and knowledge into addressing pressing social issues like poverty and unemployment.

Moreover, young people are at the forefront of digital innovation. Their adaptability and familiarity with technology make them adept at using and creating technological advancements. Focusing on science, technology, and innovation in education can prepare a technologically savvy workforce that enhances a country’s global competitiveness and attracts foreign investments.

However, it’s important not to neglect the elderly. They bring a wealth of experience and specialized knowledge. They can mentor younger employees, ensuring consistent training and skill improvement, contributing to a well-educated workforce that drives long-term development. Many seniors also have the time and willingness to participate in community activities, promoting social cohesion and supporting public services.

In conclusion, investing in young people is vital for a nation’s growth, but a balanced approach that supports both the young and the elderly leads to greater economic and social stability.

Sample Essay (Band 8.0)

Government investment in the young generation is considered to be the most effective approach which could ensure future preparedness for a country. Although there are certain justifications for such a proposal, from my point of view, a well-rounded policy should strike a balance between addressing the needs of both the young and the elderly in society. 

Firstly, young individuals can indeed contribute significantly to social progress and alleviate pressing national problems. There is no doubt that young people make up the majority of the future labor force and represent the potential leaders of a nation.

Therefore, by being equipped with chances to pursue education and develop themselves comprehensively in terms of well-being, soft skills, character building and many other aspects, such a prospective intellectual and productive workforce could make positive contributions to society.

In other words, they can take on positions with a lucrative income, start up their own business and pay taxes which can lead to increased government revenue and thus foster economic development. Furthermore, they can channel their energy and acquired  knowledge toward addressing contemporary urgent social issues which their country is facing, such as poverty, unemployment and social unrest. 

Secondly, it is crucial to recognize that digital innovation is predominantly driven by the young generation. Young people, who are characterized by their willingness to experience and adapt to changes, have grown up with technology and are thus adept at making use of technological innovations.

Given a technology-driven society in which occupations constantly evolve alongside increasingly capable machines, an education with an emphasis on science, technology and innovations could build a future young workforce who is ready to embrace fresh developments, bring novel perspectives and make significant technological breakthroughs. This would, in turn, increase a country’s global competitiveness, attract foreign investment and ensure long-term economic benefits.

However, advocating for the exclusive allocation of government resources to young people would overlook the significance of resources directed towards the elderly. Older employees have a wealth of experience and specialised knowledge they have obtained throughout their working lives.

Such an accumulation of expertise enables them to ensure the consistency of staff training, the improvement of younger employees’ skills through their leadership, and allows a country to build a well-educated workforce that is the driving force behind long-term development. Moreover, many senior citizens have additional time and a greater readiness to participate in community activities, promoting social cohesion and the support of various public services.

In conclusion, while it is understandable why investing in the potential of young people is necessary for the sustained growth and prosperity of any nation, a society which invests in both ends of the age spectrum would achieve greater economic and social stability. 

Bước 4: Từ vựng

Vocabulary	Meaning in Vietnamese
Alleviate	Giảm bớt, làm dịu đi
Labor force	Lực lượng lao động
Comprehensively	Một cách toàn diện
Lucrative	Có lợi nhuận, sinh lời
Characterize	Miêu tả, đặc điểm chung
Novel as an adjective	Mới lạ, mới mẻ
Allocation	Phân bổ, sự phân phối
Overlook	Bỏ qua, không chú ý đến
Accumulation	Sự tích luỹ, sự tích tụ
Social cohesion	Sự đoàn kết xã hội
Prosperity	Sự thịnh vượng
Well-educated	Có trình độ học vấn cao

Now, here are some gap-fill exercises using these words/phrases:

1. The government’s program aims to ______________ poverty in rural areas by providing job opportunities.
2. The ______________ in the country is facing challenges due to an aging population.
3. The university offers a ______________ curriculum that includes not only academics but also personal development.
4. Starting a successful business can be ______________ if you have a unique idea and effective strategies.
5. The report ______________ the company’s commitment to sustainability and ethical practices.
6. The new smartphone features ______________ technology that has never been seen before.
7. The government’s ______________ of resources needs to be fair and equitable to benefit all citizens.
8. It’s important not to ______________ the contributions of senior citizens to society; they have valuable experience to offer.
9. The ______________ of wealth over generations can lead to financial stability for a family.
10. ______________ in a community can lead to a more harmonious and supportive society.
11. Economic ______________ is the goal of many nations, aiming for the well-being of their citizens.
12. A ______________ workforce is essential for driving innovation and growth in the modern world.

ANSWERS: 

1. Alleviate
2. Labor force
3. Comprehensively
4. Lucrative
5. Characterize
6. Novel 
7. Allocation
8. Overlook
9. Accumulation
10. Social cohesion
11. Prosperity
12. Well-educated

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